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美本文书如何确保其具有画面感?

How to Test Whether Your US College Essay Has Visual Specificity

2023-10-07·升学

那当然是放ChatGPT的DALL·E 3里面跑一下试试了——如果出来的画还不错,有细节又生动,那就意味着AI能够明白你写的东西想要体现什么故事,以及相对应的特质。AI能理解然后出图的话,招生官应该也差不多了。

基本流程就是:

  1. 打开GPT-4的DALL·E 3插件。
  2. 告诉其文书背景以及任务要求。
  3. 告诉其想要生成的图片风格。

一篇文书直接全部生成一副比如说十张组图,这个尝试失败。以下的例子是一段一段手动feed in的,然后图片也是一个一个出来的。

下面根据哈佛录取文书"手",逐段生成卡通风格插图。

第一段

Mom always told me that if my hands were smooth and unblemished nobody would be able to tell my age. She wore rings and gloves to cover up the premature wrinkles from her time as a waitress in high school and the scars on her fingers from her first four years in America as a seamstress.

第一段插图:妈妈的手

DALL·E 3生成:妈妈用戒指和手套遮住痕迹的画面

第二段

Try as she might, no amount of jewelry or hand cream could erase those markings. But I envied her imperfections: Mom's weathered hands spoke volumes about her strength, selflessness and love. Whenever my family gathered at the dinner table, I would steal glances at their hands. Each wrinkle and scar read like a chapter of a life well lived: a life full of purpose. When I looked at my smooth knuckles and babylike palms, I wondered when I would receive markings that told my story.

第二段插图:餐桌上各人的手

DALL·E 3生成:饭桌上偷看家人双手的画面

第三段

When Dad squeezed my hand as we crossed the street, I tried to place the sharp ridges and rock-hard calluses that dug into my soft skin. Did they come from summers in Montenegro, gripping the worn handle of the scythe to cut hay? Were they caused by heavy tiles nicking his palms during the kitchen renovations that paid for my babysitters?

第三段插图:爸爸的粗糙双手

DALL·E 3生成:爸爸握着镰刀在田间劳作的画面

第四段

During summers in Pljevlja in Montenegro, I would watch Grandma's trembling hands as she kneaded each piece of burek. What initially seemed like splotches of flour were actually burn scars from 70 years of cooking. Perhaps they came from adding one too many coals to the furnace or accidentally lifting pots out of the oven with her bare hands.

第四段插图:奶奶揉面

DALL·E 3生成:奶奶颤抖的双手揉着burek面团

第五段

Their hands symbolized their love and sacrifice for family. But my unblemished hands signified nothing in return, only evidence of wasting away their hard work. So I tried to gain markings the only way I knew how: mimicking my family's defining actions. I attempted Grandma's burek, but my imitation's flaky shell hardened each time I took it out of the oven. And my burns never felt purposeful, only documentation of my mediocrity.

第五段插图:失败的模仿

DALL·E 3生成:烤出来的面包硬壳,旁边是光滑的手

第六段

My hands began to read like a list of failed ventures — until I found volleyball. Volleyball seemed like a forbidden interest, so independent from family. But each purposeful movement left me satiated with fulfillment. I picked up the game quickly, and my parents were thrilled: Recruitment was my ticket into a top university. I even fractured my thumb while diving for the ball, the bone awkwardly jutting out as my own personal talisman of greater purpose.

第六段插图:排球扑救

DALL·E 3生成:扑球受伤的大拇指——属于自己的印记

第七段

But during high school, I was exposed to a plethora of other opportunities. I began spending Monday nights practicing cases for Mock Trial and dedicated weekends to taking photographs for my school's Dynamo literary magazine. And though my hands remained unchanged, these passions, along with others, showed me sides of my identity that I didn't know existed. But with little time left for volleyball, I came to the decision to leave my club team. My crooked thumb became an ominous reminder of another failed pursuit.

第七段插图:模拟法庭与拍摄

DALL·E 3生成:模拟法庭练习与拍摄,双手用于不同事情

第八段

My parents were furious. They perceived my new activities as unfocused distractions, leading me away from my ticket to college. I soon understood that my parents' anger did not stem from disappointment, but from unfamiliarity. Their only path forward was committing to their available roles, never pondering the existential questions I did: self-discovery in a sea of options.

第八段插图:父母的愤怒

DALL·E 3生成:父母皱眉,孩子站在一旁的家庭场景

第九段

Becoming "lost" for pursuing seemingly unconnected interests was not what they envisioned for me, but I realized that the best way to fully take advantage of my privileges was to explore all my curiosities. I stopped emulating the identities of my family and realized that my hands would eventually bear the weight of my pursuits. More importantly, those markings and hands will be my own, not my mother's or father's.

第九段插图:属于自己的双手

DALL·E 3生成:画面感收尾——一双有故事、属于自己的手

这个方法说明了什么

这篇录取文书之所以好,就是因为每一段都有具体的视觉信息——奶奶手上的面粉烫痕、父亲掌心被瓷砖划出的茧、排球扑救骨折的大拇指。每一段AI都能出图,说明招生官也不需要努力脑补,故事自然就进去了。

很多学生写文书的问题不是没有故事,而是写得太抽象、太总结性。"我从这段经历中学到了坚韧"——这句话DALL·E 3是出不了图的。画面感是一个很好的自测标准。